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 In “A trip of Shanghai world Expo”, Yixue Wang express what he felt in Shanghai world Expo. He watched many kinds of exhibitions from various countries. He went there with his family as a last trip before study aboard. His writing has clear sentences and I can easily feel and imagine what he experienced and where he went. However, when I read his story, I felt that he tends to just list what he saw without what he felt. So, I want to ask him which exhibitions were the best and worst in this event for him and why they were. Also, I am eager to know how his family felt. His story is pretty interesting and easy to understand. However, if he writes his thought more and expresses what he expects to next world Expo, the story would be more interesting and strong. I guess that he took a lot of pictures, so, his digital story telling would have good attraction.

 Jackson explains his idol star ‘Stephen Chow’, who is very famous actor in China. I didn’t know him and this story gave interesting information about him. I want to watch his movies. Most of all, the story of his past is impressive and well written. However, I think Jackson needs to write what makes him to love this actor in detail. If Jackson tells us about any his change or impression after he knew and liked him, I would easily understand why he loves him so much. Also, I can’t understand and want to ask what ‘hard-bitten’ means. Moreover, I think he needs to separate his story more to easily read each paragraph. If he uses interesting pictures about his movies or acting scene, his digital story would be more amusing and attractive.

Junghyun Hong
2010. 10. 21